Who I am? I am Aimee Noyolitzi Huerta Ramos. I was born in January 8, 1989 in Nuevo Laredo Tamaulipas, but I have lived in Aguascalientes since I was a child. In all this time i have realized about the important things about myself, such as strengths, weakness, likes and dislikes. Also in these lines I am going to talk about the most important people in my life.
The most important thing in my life is my family. I am sure that without them I wouldn´t be here. My family is integrated by five people, my dad Jose Huerta, my mom Aimee Ramos, my sister Joselyn, my brother Josue and me. My parents are teachers for this reason I want to be teacher. They are the biggest support for me, they have been with me in any moment, helping me, listen to me, whatever thing or decision I choose they are here. For that reason my family is the most important for me and I cannot live without them.
Other aspects about me are my strengths and weakness. All of them are the ingredient that makes you special. Some of my strengths are my perseverance, my patient, and I love to help other people, among others, but also I have weakness which make my personality unique, some of them are that sometime I feel insecure or I trust a lot in people who sometimes disappoint me, or for me is hard say no to other people. All of these things are the aspects that make my personality unique.
Mi likes and dislikes are significant in my personality. These things talk a lot about me. Some of my likes are watching movies, reading, chocolate, and spent time with my family and friends. But something I do not like, such as I used to desperate when something is not like i have imagine, or somebody wake up me or that people are unpunctual, but the thing that I hate is the lies or false people. These aspects talk about my personality; these things say how I am.
As a conclusion my life maybe is not perfect, but I like it the way it is. I do not want to change anything about it. I cannot imagine my life without my family and my friends. My qualities and flows make me be the way I am. I love my family, friends and myself.
Hi, just trying
ResponderEliminardo not write the things you are thinking to write just write them.
ResponderEliminarMaybe more order in the introduction
You made some mistakes in the second paragraph
Check the verb agreement.
Your question is clearly stated but grammatically incorrect (Who am I?). There are some grammar mistakes: i, weakness(es). You say "Also in these lines...", but you didn't mention what you were going to talk about previously.
ResponderEliminar2nd. paragraph. The last three lines seem a little redundant and when you say "For that reason...", Which one? You mention at least two. Some words missing like "a" teacher, "listening to me".
3rd. Check spelling of many words here. Needs coherence in ,among others, can't tell if you are talking about the people or the strenghts. Other than that I think that the ideas in the paragraph are well stated.
4th. You need a lot of cohesion and coherence here. Check your grammar and spelling: Mi, i, spent. I am not sure if the verb "talk" can be used in those expressions, maybe tell or represent? Also, if you start using verbs with ING you have to use them all in that tense and include one with chocolate.
Conclusion. It is kind of short and looks like it needs a closing sentence of some sort. You say "my life maybe is not perfect, but I like it the way it is". That is a good line but it looks out of place in the conclusion because that was not the topic of the essay.